Listening to: What I'd Say, Pt. 1, Ray Charles
Feeling: popular
I look into the mirror as
soft eye-agitating puffs of talc whirl
and fall dizzily
like a little bicyclist, cowering
because the guiding hand let go
And I say nothing
I have seen myself so many times before now
but never so clearly
no residue could tarnish my mind
because I skinned my knees until they were raw
and sped until it felt my feet would sprout wings...
:-)
This is good.
Way better than the crap you used to write. You've really dropped the pretentious tone and it works out nicely.